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"No, please no", I thought to myself. A wave of panic over came my body. I couldn't breath. I felt like my heart was pounding in my ears. I was standing in front of the Grey's Anatomy calender Luke had given me for Christmas last year silently recounting all the weeks in August and September. I was praying for an error,but it didn't look like that was going to happen. I went and picked up my phone and dialed Luke's number. It rang numerous times before he finally answered.

"hello"

"Hey Luke are you busy"

"No not really I was just about to get my film developed nothing really important."

"Can you pick me up?"

"Uhh yeah sure As just give me five minutes.

I had known Luke since preschool. He'd always been shy and calm but he had a charisma that no one could touch. He was always willing to help someone in trouble in whatever way he could. That was why I'd called him instead of Jade. I loved Jade but I didn't need her there making the situation more dramatic then what it might be.

I knew he wasn't over exaggerating about being here in five minutes. He lived 4 houses to the left of mine. I went to the kitchen and poured a small glass of orange juice that I drank while pacing back and forth from the kitchen table to the small window over the sink. When I finally saw his blue Honda crv pull up in front of my house a feeling of peace swept through me. I got my purse from the handle of the door and walked to the car.

I opened the door and silently sat in the seat. I put on my seat belt and stared ahead for several minutes before I realized the car wasn't moving. I turned to face Luke. He was starring at me with a look of worry written across his face. I knew despite trying to hide my distress he'd picked up on it right away.

"Where are we going" he asked

"Rite Aid" I said trying to sound perky

He started the car and pulled out into the main traffic. I rolled down the window letting the cool autumn air hit my face relaxing my nerves. We went on like this for several minutes. Luke studied the road. Carefully turning the wheel along all the twists and curves. I looked at him carefully taking in his face. He had changed very little in the fifteen years I had known him. His hair was still a reddish,brown curly mop on his. His eyes were still the same shade of amber. He'd gotten taller but was still lean with small muscles. He was no heart throb but he had potential.

The car came to a sudden stop. I looked forward we had arrived. We got out and walked through the doors of Eckerd.

"I'm going to drop this off" he said holding his undeveloped film for me to see.

"Okay sure, I'll just be over there I said pointing to no place particular. I waited for Luke to leave my side before practically running through the isles to the woman's section. It took forever for me to find the pregnancy tests considering they were at the very bottom of the shelves. I grabbed two tests Clearblue and some generic brand. I held them each in one of my hands and read the backs. It didn't take long for me decide on the Clearblue. I headed for the checkout counter.

The cashier was an older woman named June with pink hair. She smiled I handed her the pregnancy test. She looked at me then at the box and gave me a look that said,"Well your totally screwed I don't even know why you're buying this when you know what the results are."

"19.88" she said between smacking her gum

I pulled a 20 out of my wallet and placed it on the counter. Out of the corner of my eye I saw Luke standing by the next register looking at the latest issue of Star Magazine.

"1.12 is your change have a nice day"

Thank God I thought. I quickly walked past Luke and to the car with such authority all he did was follow. He unlocked the door and we got in. He looked at the bag in my lap which was semi see through.

Ten minutes later we were in front of my house. My attention was drawn to a bright red coat sitting on my front porch. It was Jade.

"I dont want to do this by myself" I said to Luke

"Do you want me to stay?" He asked

"Please" I begged.

He turned off the engine and we walked up the driveway. Jade jumped up and ran to meet us with a huge grin.

"Hey guys!" she said "Where have you been? dont you answer your phones? I've been waiting forever. I jus- "

She stopped mid sentence starring at the bag in my hands like it carried death.

"Oh Damn" she said

I got my key and unlocked the door. I silently opened the door and headed to bathroom. I placed my fate on the counter and ripped open the contents of the little box. I read the directions. Eight minutes later I was leaning against the door, waiting,pondering. Why hadn't I said no. I was such an idiot. Had the condom broke? I'd been on the pill. All the stupid protection we had used obviously was a waste.

It was time to look but, I just wasn't ready to look it was my future written in that little stick. I closed my eyes and cleared my mind. I picked up the test and slowly opened my the words came into focus. P-R-E-G-N-A-T-E. Damn it I wispered. The sea of hysterical tears started to come. I slid down the wall onto the floor buring my face into my hands. What was I going to do?

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Sounds like an interesting story. There's drama all right. I've noticed many grammar mistakes, especially spelling (it's "pregnant" not "pregnate", it's "breathe" (a verb) not "breath," (a noun) and "over came" is one word) and missing commas.There were also some little minor glitches with some sentences that made it sound weird, like, "It was time to look but, I just wasn't ready to look it was my future written in that little stick." You seem to be missing a period after "look." If you fix it the mistakes a bit and reword some sentences, the story would sound a lot more sophisticated and better.

I liked how natural it sounded when you were describing Luke. My fav. sentence was,

"He was no heart throb but he had potential. "

You have some talent. Keep working on it and especially keep on writing! Good luck!

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wow this is like reallllllly good.

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WOW!

I loved that...

You have A LOT of potential.

There are a few grammatical errors, but it is the 1st draft I'm sure, so no biggie.

Other than that it was great and I would like it if you could send me as you write, I would LOVE to read it. I already want to know what happens. =)

I also loved how vividly you described everything. great characters!

Keep it up!

-- Peace

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Of all the little stories people post here, this is the first one I actually read. (That, my friend, is a huge compliment!)

Although there are many grammatical, punctuation and spelling errors, it kept my attention and now I want to know what happens the rest of the story. Grammar is easy to fix and this story definitely has potential!

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nice one! i like the details and adjectives used.

Write a book about it.

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That was a very good story. You need to work on grammar

and their are a few parts that were not very importaint that you could leave out such as the cashier having pink hair.You could also add some imformation and begin and end the story earlier and later. Over all though it was a great story